The Test(to get in Dark Jedi)

[Jayden Vel Dar/Garl Shillar]

(i land on the planet called Allderon.To search for a man called General Tyranib.Since he is in the Republic it should be hard to capture him.Most likely i will have to kill his gaurds while he is sleeping and then capture him.I walk into the city where General Tyranib is located and i see him getting drivin in a speeder to a location i do not know.)

(Jayden)
Is that General Tyranib?

(Civilian)
Yes.

(Jayden)
do you know where he is going?

(civilian)
I heard he likes to go to the cantina.About this hour.

(Jayden)
Where is the cantina?

(Civilian)
About eight blocks that way.

(Jayden)
Thanks.

(i hop in my speeder and ride down to the cantina.I get off the speeder and i walk in.I see General Tyranib accross the room,with about four well armed guys.I think i will follow him to his apartment and then kill the gaurds and capture him and then fly off in my speeder to the ship and leave.After waiting for several hours General Tyranib leaves the cantina and so do i.I wait for him to get in his speeder and leave.When they leave i do.I follow them for about twenty minutes and they stop and they all get out and go in the building.By now it is really late.I wait until they all go into the building to go in.I then go in the build and they go up the stairs because there are people on the elevator and he wants to see the view because you can see the veiw from the windows on the steps.i follow them up the steps and i wait until General Tyranib goes in his room.Then one of the gaurds goes to the bathroom and i follow him in there and while he is pissing i stab him in the back and i grab his body and put it a stall.after 15 minutes another gaurd walks in and says what the hell are you doing to the dead gaurd.I jump out from behind the door and choke him to death with a wire, i then throw him in the same stall.i walk out of the bathroom and dive at the two gaurds killing one by stabbing him in the stomach.The other shoots and i block it killing him. General Tyranib wakes up and runs out in the hall way and says what the hell are you doing.I then punch him so hard that he is knocked out cold. i pick his body up and run down the steps. People in the lobby are like what the hell is the that man doing?I throw General Tyranib in the speeder and turn it on and i fly back to my ship.I pick the body up and run on the ship and i pt him in the Force Cage.I go back out and put the speeder back on the ship.While on the ship i turn the ship on and leave.)

[Jayden Vel Dar/Garl Shillar]

(While in space i set a course for the Dark Jedi planet.When i arrive i send a message to Lady Rajani Zahra)
My Lady i have captured General Tyranib.Shall you come to me or should i come to you?

[Lady Zahra/Jules]

This is the type of rp I warned you against. Getting to him isn't that easy and will take a while to do so. You have completely forgotten other security devices and such....PLUS he's an experience soldier. Just sneaking up on him unawares like that didn't happen. Also, what of getting the uniforms with little blood? You completely disregarded that....as well as getting his personal ship with the crew inside. Your job as a dark jedi would be such as to be silent and unnoticed unless you want to be noticed. Security would have gone off and you would have been caught. Sorry, dear, that rp didn't cut it. You can have a second chance to start over, but overall this rp didn't work and wouldn't get you in.